I can’t believe it, but I have forgotten my very own birthday! How wrong is this? Sad but true, and this is how it all played out.
Waking up, I thought today was just going to be another ordinary day , but...NO WAY! Unexpectedly, my mum shouted, “HAPPY BIRTHDAY SON!!!” I stood where I was, completely confused and wondered aloud, “What in the world are you talking about?” “Ahhh ,it is MY birthday,” I said as I smacked myself on the side of the head.
When I finally got up, I was as hungry as a grizzly bear that had missed out on its’ dinner. It felt like I was going to starve to death, but fortunately, there was some outstanding news that would save me. I rushed to the shower, got dressed, and set out to annoy my mum by asking her repeatedly, “Can we go now?” She eventually agreed, and we hopped in the car . We were on our way.
I saw something in the distance and wondered what it was. As we got closer ,I saw the sign more clearly,“Happy Days!” It is a restaurant, and my growling stomach is more than a little excited. Closer, closer, almost there now. I opened the door and there it was, my best friend. I grabbed a plate and walked over to the buffet to say hello. Good to see you Butter Chicken! Where have you been Hot Crispy Chips?
I love my friends!
Nezinli your writing didn't just hook me - it reeled me in, hook, line and sinker! Writing like this takes considerable creative energy and recrafting and judging by my reaction and the other comments you received it was well worth it.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for brightening my day. Keep them coming like this
Mrs Burt
Nezini I was so impressed with your writing it made me laugh. Your descriptions were so good I could just see you at "Happy Days", licking those lips of yours. You have the makings of an excellent author and you will keep your readers entertained making them laugh out loud and as a writer that is pretty hard to do. So well done you:)
ReplyDeleteMrs Blake
Fantastic writing Nez!
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this as it pulled me right into how you were feeling and made me feel part of the action.
Well done Mate.
You keep up the great work.
Hi Nezinli
ReplyDeleteI told Mr Barks ages ago that I would leave a comment and I'm just so sorry its been a long time coming. Anyway you should of seen the group of teachers who were hanging on to Mr Barks' every word as he read out your story in the staffroom. We were so hooked in that we almost missed Mr Burts notices! You have a great way with words and I could just tell that you had written this as it really captures a lot of your funny sense of humour. Great writing Nez! I am sooooo proud of you!
Mrs Lagitupu